It irritated me but mostly because I kept trying to analyse what it was about it that was irritating me and that distracted me from reading the story. At first I thought it was because it was first person but then I realised that I was reading something else simultaneously that was first person and that wasn't bothering me at all. I just spent the whole time going "why is she doing that and is it having the effect on me that she wants it to? Clearly not if I am spending this much time thinking about it." There were individual sentences I liked though :-)